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"They Were People Who Behaved As Monsters." – David Avallone On Twilight Zone / The Shadow #4

Published Wed, 27 Jul 2016 13:00:38 -0500

A Writer's Commentary: David Avallone talks Twilight Zone/The Shadow #4, on sale today from Dynamite. Cover by Francesco Francavilla, interiors by Dave Acosta.

The cover.

When Francesco Francavilla was doing the cover for issue#3, he tweeted that he was listening to Bernard Herrmann's soundtrack from Vertigo. (The movie, not the comic book imprint.) When issue #4 came around and they asked if I had any ideas for a cover, I said, "Why not a pastiche of Saul Bass' famous Vertigo cover?" Francesco ran with it, and the result is a beautiful cover. The Twilight Zone spiral gets us already halfway there.

Page one.

A little Serling-esque voice-over, and we're off. Dave Acosta found that authentic Nazi propaganda poster online, and added it to this scene. We collaborated with a private Pinterest page, swapping photo references and ideas back and forth. After this commentary is published, I'll make the Pinterest board public so people can see a little more of the process. Check my Twitter to see it. (@DAvallone)

Page two.

I spent enough time researching the uniforms and rank-systems of American Nazis/Bund that I probably got on some NSA watchlist. I promise, guys, it was all for the comic. I hate these guys. "Kreisleiter" means "regional commander", sort of. The name Penzler might be familiar to some old mystery fans.

Page three.

The Shadow makes a snide reference to talented Nazi filmmaker/stooge Leni Riefenstahl. Penzler calls the Shadow a vigilante, and not qualified to invoke the law. I always think it's a good idea to give the villain a valid point every now and again.

Page four.

"Dallenbach's" was the name of a popular swimming hole in my home town of East Brunswick, NJ. I've always wanted to use the name in something.

Pages six and seven.

In the fourth issue, we finally see the Shadow use one of his "powers". In this case, hypnosis… which reveals what evil that lurks in the hearts of men… or Hitlerjugend. These kids were real. They weren't monsters. They were people who behaved as monsters. I gave this one, for our purposes, perhaps too simple a motivation… but it's hard to get at a topic as big and nuanced as anti-Semitism in a 20-page comic book.

Pages ten through thirteen.

In prepping to write this book, I ran through the synopses of all the original TZ episodes, looking for common threads, tropes, themes, etc. At the beginning, I wasn't sure what I'd do for issue #4 … but as the story came together I realized that all the elements pointed towards this scene. The Shadow shows mercy to a Nazi youth, and introduces him to some new ideas… and the embodiment of those ideas in his long friendship with Moses Shrevnitz. I feel confident Serling would have approved of this scene. To me, this is what The Twilight Zone is all about: an arrogant man learns to apologize, and a young man consumed with hatred is shown another way.

Page twelve.

"…but my old friend Moses Shrevnitz is a son of Abraham." I thought long and hard about that sentence. "Jew" is thrown around with such hatred by the Nazi characters in this issue that it seemed wrong for the Shadow to use it, even benignly. In the period, he might have said "Hebrew", but I had a feeling that would also read awkwardly to a modern audience. "Son of Abraham" seemed appropriately poetic and Old Testament for the Shadow's particular manner of speaking. As a Son of Abraham myself, I felt it worked best, for the period and for today's reader.

Page fifteen.

Guns are loud. I love Moe putting his fingers in his ears as Margo bangs away with the .45 right over his head.

Pages seventeen and eighteen.

There's a pretentious writer cliché: that the characters take over the story. Originally, this scene ended with Peter's sacrifice and the Shadow and company making good their escape. It was supposed to be the shocker that ends the sequence. I really wanted three pages for the final scene. But I swear… the Shadow wouldn't let me do it. He would not run away after seeing Peter Dallenbach gunned down. I was prepared to move on to the next scene, the epilogue… and then the Shadow said, "Shrevvy, stop the car!" And machine-gunned a bunch of Nazis. This story was supposed to be about the Shadow learning mercy… and this final action muddies and complicates that. But people are muddy and complicated: even having just learned a lesson about mercy, there was no way the Shadow wouldn't avenge Peter Dallenbach, and he insisted I give him another page to do it. And who am I to say no to the Shadow?

Pages nineteen and twenty.

Epilogue at the Cobalt Club. The Shadow tries to understand the journey he's just taken, and finds a little proof that it all was real. I considered making the "twist" more clear by including a little flashback inset of "Justice" slashing Allard's hand, but decided to have a little more faith in the audience. As a Twilight Zone trope, it's borrowed from episodes like "King Nine Will Not Return": the dream/hallucination leaves physical evidence that it really happened.

I've said before that my favorite part of this series was the chance to write in the "voice" of Rod Serling. I rewrote this final narration quite a few times trying to wrap it all up, to get the voice right, and to suggest that this experience will maybe have a lasting effect on the Shadow, as he continues his war on crime.

I'd like to thank Dynamite, and Executive Editor Joe Rybandt in particular, for the unique opportunity to combine two of my favorite things, and tell this story.

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